Saturday, September 11, 2010

Depression (First Draft)

Fighting Teen Depression 

“Depression is very common and affects as many as 1 in 8 people in their teen years. Depression affects people of every color, race, economic status or age; however, it does seem to affect more girls than guys. “ (Depression--Why people get depressed?) Teenage depression is highly studied by psychologists and other medical professions to end this serious epidemic that results in numerous teen deaths every year. There are several reasons why teens suffer from depression; whether it be from parents divorce, the death of a family member/or loved one or a stressful home life. (Teens Health) Because of depression many teens respond negatively to the extra stress in their lives. It’s important that someone suffering from depression admits they have a problem and seeks help; utilizing their resources will lead to a positive step toward improving their mental health. Although, there are many causes of depression, it’s vital that teens suffering ask for help immediately in order to refrain from reacting irrationally.
“Depression is more than being moody/ It affects people at any age.” (Depression) Many teens get depressed after an intense ordeal such as a parents divorce, the death of a loved one, stressful home life, violence, peer pressure or break up with a boyfriend/girlfriend.(Depression--Why do people get depressed?) In a school environment teens are up against rumors that spread through the hallways. Gossiping about others and spreading of rumors can be hurtful for those who are being judged, ridiculed and humiliated. This makes students feel ostracized and isolated from their peers. At this age teens want to feel included and accepted by there peers. However, if they’re bullied or taunted these students can face other emotional traumas such as loneliness, anxiousness or despondency. These feelings will soon follow into their home life causing a stressful lifestyle outside of school. Unfortunately, this accelerates the stages leading into depression.
Often teens react much differently to the pain of depression; while many cause mischief at school or at home, others will experiment with alcohol, sex or drugs. Instead of asking for professional help, teens will try to “escape” or “medicate” themselves from their emotions; running away or putting yourself under the influence makes the pain disappear temporally. When teens get involved with drugs it may lead to serious substance abuse or obsessive compulsive disorders. Once teens start to overuse drugs it can impact the natural chemicals produced in the brain and causes severe damage to brain receptors; in turn makes the
road to recovery even more challenging. (Depression, Drugs and Alcohol) Although, teens may consider drugs, alcohol or sex to relieve their pain, choosing either of these options are unhealthy ways to react to their problems. Many cases show that some teens with this mental illness take their own lives or harm others around them. Teens need to understand the consequences to their actions by learning healthier way to deal with stress/depression. (“Teens Early Mental Disorder Detection”)
Myth, talking about depression makes things worse; false! Teens can’t warm up to their parents or any adult in general for several reasons (Depression--Why do people get depressed?); one, they believe adults “won’t understand” how they’re feeling, two, teenagers don’t want to fess up to anything they did wrong, or three, they don’t want to be judged by someone they love. It’s important that teens suffering from this mental illness stay connected to both friends and family. If they’re not comfortable with telling a counselor or therapist, than express their feelings to someone they trust. Talking to a friend can be beneficial for them and it allows their friends/family to become aware of their condition. Friends and family are always here to assist the people they care about. It’s imperative that teens with depression stay social and active with extracurricular activities. The last thing they should do is isolate themselves from society altogether; doing so will speed up the depression process. While getting involved with extra social groups, make sure depressed teens avoid people who abuse drugs, alcohol or cause trouble. This king of behavior can influence further mental breakdowns and other psychological problems. In addition to encouraging them to be open and honest about the situation, it’s to make certain that they understand they’re not alone! There are numerous people including psychologists, doctors, therapists, teachers, counselors, that are here to make the upcoming generation fully functional and healthy. (“Dealing with Depression”) There are a variety of routes an individual with depression can follow, however, the most important  is to choose a path and not end up at a dead end.
“Clinical depression is more than just feeling blue from time to time. It is a serious condition that a affects a person’s mind, body and spirit; it impacts every aspect of one’s life.” (What is Depression?) Even though a school environment can be stressful, try to avoid people who have negative attitudes on a daily basis and spend time with people who you share the same interests/goals as you. Through the teenage years it’s hard not to be influenced by your peers, however, lead by example and stay away from peer pressure.
Teens will often give into peer pressure (drugs, sex or alcohol) if they’re dealing with depression because they want a depressant to make them feel better. In this case, it’s up to the parents to reassure their depressed teens in order to make them feel supported and comforted by their families. Reaching out for help and talking to a therapist about psychological problems is a big step for teens; it’ll take time for them to open up, so don’t rush them. Depressed teens have a responsibility to choose a direction that will cure their subconscious problems.

4 comments:

  1. The extensive research gives credibility, but I found the lengthy quotations distracting. Of course, that could just be because I'm easily distracted, but I find it easier to focus on a text when it is written more in one voice.

    I think the upbeat tone is a great choice to use when talking about this particular topic. All throughout, the word choice was excellent, but it looks like spell check was playing some tricks on you, there are some homophone switches. (there-their-they're)

    Overall, though, I had trouble following a unifying thread in your essay. I enjoyed the informative text, but had trouble hooking it onto a thesis statement.


    I hope that helps at least a bit, if it's just annoying, ignore me.

    bye

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  2. I'll make sure i change everything before handing it into him tomorrow. Thanks for your advice

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  3. You switch tenses in your conclusion and start talking directly to the reader. I'm not sure if that is a good thing or not, just an observation. Good job =]

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  4. thanks "kimberly"!!! I appreciate your feedback1!!

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